| two general rants |
[07 Jan 2010|10:52am] |
I've noticed that some fandoms more than others are prone to having a plot that goes something like this:
1. two characters make a rather strange and implausible bet, (which is obviously because A wants to sex up B)
2. character B loses, and then has to be A's slave for a week or something like that
3. sex
(4. twu wuv)
The thing is, I often feel like these "bets" are nothing more than poorly-hidden plot contrivances. I know that some characters would probably be the betting type, but....
Just because they made a bet as an excuse to act OOC doesn't make your story plausible, especially when the fact that it's just a ploy to lead to eventual sex is pretty obvious to the reader from the get-go. If you had them make a bet which was not completely ridiculous and overdone <small>(such as, oh, B IS A'S SLAVE FOR A WEEK)</small> and then showed a natural progression towards the relationship - fine.
"But they made a bet!" is not actually a good enough excuse, most of the time.
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Sometimes people write a oneshot with a cutesy title, and then it suddenly turns into a many-shot. That's fine and dandy. The problem is that sometimes when you try to have your set of oneshots have a linked "theme" in their titles, it can get sort of ridiculous when you start running out of ideas, which leaves you posting what might be very nice stories with, frankly, stupid titles.
I honestly think it's better to leave out the cutesy theme and just give your stories decent titles, in the long run. Just write "part of the ____ 'verse" or something, sheesh.
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[06 Jan 2010|11:26pm] |
Dear "author":
Normally when people post things on Fanfiction.net, they are (as the name of the site implies) works of fanfiction. Posting a "story" that is not actually a story at all but rather a request for other people to spam you with ideas so that you can use them is not the purpose of the site. You want to brainstorm? Get a beta, because when I am looking for fic to read, I don't want to have my time wasted when I read through a summary and it says you have been "struggling to come up with an idea for a story for months." I do not care. I'm here to read fic, not help you come up with an idea for one.
XOXO
Me
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| Dialect rant (like we needed another one) |
[06 Jan 2010|10:55pm] |
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Okay, author, I have to start off saying that I love you for being in this fandom. No, really. I mean that. Given that about three people I know have even heard of this movie, I was very much surprised and delighted to find fic for it. It makes me sad that such an underrated gem(with such slashy potential, rowwr) has such a small author following and I hesitate at biting the hand that feeds me. But…well… ( nitpickish rant to follow )
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| AIR: Hopeful Eyes - Synopsis. |
[07 Jan 2010|01:27am] |
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Title: AIR: Hopeful Eyes.
Tagline: Because like air we are there, you just can't see us ...
Chapters: Prologue + 33
Author: ![[info]](http://l-stat.livejournal.com/img/userinfo.gif) luna_no_koibito
Dedicated to: My beloved sister neechanwrites . Genre: Action, romance, human drama, introspection.
Warnings: Depending on chapter
Rating: from PG-113 to NC-17 depending on chapter
Pairing: Will be revealed through out the story (I will write them in the headers for every chapter)
Bands: Girugamesh, 12012, MUCC, Buck-Tick, SiD, Alice Nine., ScReW, D'espairsRay, Nightmare, Lynch.
Disclaimer: The story is mine, for me to share. The bands are not … like they would care.
Comment: This fiction will have a prequel called AIR: Hopeful Eyes, and a sequel called AIR: Vengeful Eyes, thus some things will be dealt in depth, in other occasions. But feel free to ask, there might be something that I might simply not have written clearly, in case there were some misunderstandings. Summary: Something such as the perfect world, does not exist. Earth will never live in peace, because for it be so, war must exist. Just as countless bad things will continue happening, in order for us to appreciate the few good ones, or unfairness will continue to reign undisputed, in order for us to be willing to fight for righteousness. It is just in the natural balance of things, yet as humans we believe in change, we believe in an eventual final victory of the good over the bad; ideally, as humans we have learned to always hope for the best. In doing so, we should be inspired to actually make the change, and not simply sit, and watch. That being said, the reality of things, is that the majority of us will still find it easier to merely accept whatever injustice or harm, and merely run with the flow, but there do exist, even if only a few, some us, who have decided to make the change, and run their own flow... AIR.
LIST OF CHARACTERS
... coming soon.
888***--- BACK TO FANFICTION ARCHIVE ---***888
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| Megalomania | AU Roleplay Forum | East Asian Music |
[06 Jan 2010|09:19pm] |
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Since the beginning of time there existed Celeste, a realm unreachable in the physical world. Celeste was home to a group of deities that lived together harmoniously. Each had a talent of their own, but all mighty powers. One day a unanimous decision was made to create a world where they would be worshiped by beings of their own image. And so Cosmos was created, a planet much like our Earth but smaller as it only supported four large countries.
NAETALIA1 , the prosperous; MOARRDAI2, the valiant; KRYTEPE3, the serene; and lastly, VELARIIS4, the strong. These societies were watched over by all the gods, but Chaos, who had created Cosmos and all its inhabitants, held sovereignty over it. All was peaceful for years.
Until the other gods grew jealous of Chaos's rule and popularity. The people would worship Chaos far more than them, if they were given attention at all. A scheme to rid the universe of Chaos came into play and in Chaos's sleep was when the unionized slaughter commenced. Everything was thrown into calamity as the feud who became ultimate ruler escalated into a full out war. The people of the four countries are to choose a side or be killed. Neutrality is not a option.
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Pronuciations
1) Naetalia - nay-tell-yuh, rhymes with "yay fella"
2) Moarrdai - mor-dye, rhymes with "poor shy"
3) Krytepe - cur-tip-ee, rhymes with "your dip cheese"
4) Velariis - val-la-russ, rhymes with "callouses"
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| Need of Beta or Co-Author |
[06 Jan 2010|10:50pm] |
Well as you can tell from the title, I'm in need of a beta or co-author for my worthless fic.
(Don't wish to bother my other beta she's working on my Broken fic) English is my 6th language and i've been studying it for not even 6 months, I would really appreciate it if some one would help. Leave me a comment if your intrested. >.<
Please Delete if not allowed
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| CSI slash fanficrant |
[06 Jan 2010|08:04pm] |
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I'm new around here - hopefully I'm doing this right!
Dear CSI slashers - some of you are fantastic writers, amazing scenes and all.
However, writing a story with Nick and Greg drunk off their asses and staying at Catherine's house to sleep it off - only to have the boys end up doing other things besides sleep (duh) ... well that could get a bit noisy, wouldn't it dear writer? So it would be hard to miss the racket in the guest room, yet you keep telling everyone asking about Catherine's whereabouts that she was asleep the whole time. I'm calling shenanigans on that one, dammit!
Now, onto something else - that might be a (smutty) fandom-general problem: ( Conditioner is not your friend )
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[06 Jan 2010|11:01pm] |
Dear Star Trek Reboot writer:
So you ship Kirk/Spock. That's fine. But there's that pesky Spock/Uhura getting in the way. No big deal; canon's never stopped a shipper before. I was happy to see that you actually showed Spock and Uhura's relationship falling apart instead of going with one of the four standard plots ("Spock realizes Kirk is his soulmate and dumps Uhura," "Uhura realizes Kirk is Spock's soulmate and dumps Spock," "Uhura and Spock broke up for some reason, on to the slash!" and "let's ignore Uhura's existence"), however I have some issues with how you build up to the break-up.
Uhura is not going to suddenly start wanting Spock to behave like the perfect human boyfriend. She is not going to expect romantic dinners and flowers, and she certainly isn't going to expect him to guess what she wants without giving him any hints (much less discussing things) and then be sulky and passive-aggressive when he doesn't figure out.
Spock's attraction to Uhura is not completely intellectual. Yes, that's a factor, and probably a pretty important one, but he isn't dating her just because he wanted to talk about the latest issue of Xenolinguists Monthly with someone. Their relationship is not cold and passionless. And if he doesn't understand why she's acting strangely, he'd ask and try to understand. He might insult emotions, humans, and human courtship rituals, but he'd still ask.
Finally, how can you have Spock and Uhura break up because she's too emotional and human and can't cope with Spock's Vulcan-ness and then expect your readers to believe Kirk/Spock will work? The only thing Kirk has going over your portrayal of Uhura is that he'll skip the passive and go straight to aggressive, and that might give Spock a clue that Kirk is unhappy.
EDIT for typo.
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| Another HP rant |
[06 Jan 2010|10:29pm] |
It's 1991, and Hogwarts letters have gone out to all incoming first years. One letter, however, has not reached its intended recipient, because Harry Potter is nowhere to be found.
Now imagine that, right around this time, Professor Severus Snape shows up at Hogwarts with a young boy in tow. A young boy aged about 10 or 11. A boy with a shock of black hair, and unusually green eyes. Who is extraordinarily magically gifted. And speaks Parseltongue. And calls himself Harry Patterson.
How the fuck does no one make the connection? Fail!plot line is made of fail. Someone is going to be asking questions, even if Snape is doing his darnedest to make sure that no one does. And by "doing his darnedest," I mean "simply not telling anyone that Harry Patterson = Harry Potter."
ETA: I know that Harry's being a Parselmouth doesn't come out until the second book, but the author makes particular note of the "oh shit, they're gonna figure it out because of the Parseltongue thing," so it was another instance of *headdeask* for me.
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| Writers in video game fandoms, please take note: |
[06 Jan 2010|07:26pm] |
Real people don't have hit points. Neither do they have magic/spirit/whatever points. So it's kind of jarring when you refer to a character as having five HP left in the middle of a dramatic scene, and really weird when your mage starts doing math in the middle of a fight to calculate exactly how many spells she can cast with the MP she has left. D:
On a similar note... despite how it may work in RPGs, potions and other heal items generally work best when consumed, not when thrown in an injured teammate's general direction. (Your guess is as good as mine when it comes to heal items that do not seem like they'd be particularly edible, but hey, you're a writer! Creativity is your thing, right?)
Is a little bit of realism too much to ask for...?
ETA: The above only applies to serious fic - I'm all for joking around with game mechanics for the sake of humor, but it doesn't work so well when you're trying to convey how horrible it is that Character A is at death's door.
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| Oh look... Daddy's smacking Junior again... |
[06 Jan 2010|07:19pm] |
Dear writer.
I like your fics, I really do. You have a great sense of plot, your dialog is fun and snappy, and your characterization is good.
Except for *one* character that is.
Why for the love of little green apples is Dad suddenly the most *violent* SOB around. The sheer amount of mental and pyshical abuse he heaps on his son are just staggering. And it's not just one fic, it's all of them that you write with him appearing.
Only he never struck his son, not *once* in canon. He loves him enough in fact to *die* for him and has always been proud of his child's accomplishments. So where you're getting this evil abusive version when everyone else is spot on just baffles me.
And it ruins the whole fic.
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| New Member posting! ^_^ |
[06 Jan 2010|08:28pm] |
To the reviewer who responded to a slash fic:
Please don't post a paragraph-long, homophobic rant about how much you're SO disgusted and dissapointed at the slash pairing, and then stick in the sentence: "I don't actually have anything against gay people in real life." If you're homophobic, FINE. There's no need to be a hypocrite as well.
( Read more... )
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| It's my favorite pairing, too. D: |
[07 Jan 2010|10:17am] |
I am so glad you wrote this pairing; it's one I adore and a rare one even in its already-rare fandom. I am not so glad about how you wrote them.
First, she's something of an innocent in sexual and romantic things, and he likes the parts of her that are innocent and wouldn't want to ruin them. You said this in your fic, actually, which was Doing It Right. Having them shrug this off after a couple paragraphs and sexor randomly anyway? was Doing It Wrong.
Next, she's not going to jump into bed with... anyone. It would never "just happen" as the fic said, and certainly not because she initiated and wanted it. She is the type of person who has other priorities, is not sexually experienced, and would need to develop some sort of real connection first, which they don't have at this point and you did not develop or explain in the fic. Oh, and she slapped him for trying to touch her in canon. Jumping into bed with him in a fic set in the same episode? No.
Now let's get to the sex itself, because that's sexy. Only, not. It was written like very awkward teen sex. This would actually be a refreshing change from most smut fic and fit for her, but the problem is that you made the awkward all about him. He is pretty much the opposite of an awkward teen; he is confident and self-assured and suave; not to mention mature enough to be a mentor figure and a leader. You could convince me he's not sexually experienced if you went from a 'he'd be too demanding and not consider anyone good enough and worth the chase' angle, but you cannot convince me he'd be made of awkward fumbling.
Last, he is a very emotional person, yes. But these emotions are kept very firmly internalized. When they start to threaten to affect his judgment, we see him do anything to shove them down and act only according to his rational goals and motivations. This? Does not really describe the sort of person who'd cry over having good sex and suddenly be in touch with the emotions he's been denying so well that even he is unaware of some of them. (Healing vagina instead of healing penis? Should we count that as novel?)
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| Sense Make Not |
[06 Jan 2010|07:02pm] |
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You wrote a long, supposedly plotty fic with what appears to be an amusing storyline and everything. I won't know for certain because I won't be reading it. Why in the world, after a good lead in and summary, do you feel the need to bash not only a secondary character, but the actress who plays her in your author's notes?
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| Glee rant |
[06 Jan 2010|07:44pm] |
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Puck should probably not be described as "sweeter than usual." This implies that he is usually sweet. That's kind of like describing Sue Sylvester as "more reasonable than usual." On the other hand, given that in this fic he is - without any development or explanation - the ~best boyfriend ever~, just slightly gutter-minded, likes being called Noah, and enjoys going for long walks in the park with Kurt while holding hands and talking about their future children, that phrase really isn't a problem at all.
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| Yes, another blood donor rant (how hard can it be to get it right, people?). |
[07 Jan 2010|01:28am] |
This is the scenario that I encountered in a otherwise (semi)decent fic.
This guy had an accident. Apparently he has burst his aorta. It's very tragic, especially when he passes out in his saviours arms. He's taken to a hospital for he needs emergency surgery.
But, oh! There has just been a major car accident so the blood bank are depleted. And our hero has the rare blood type A+ so his parents are called in so we can find out which one of them can donate to our anaemic champion.
But there is a deep dark secret lurking! His father is not the real father! The suspense is immense. The real father finds out about our brave mans plight and freely gives of his life blood. Anonymously, of course. We would not want the reveal to happen to early, do we?
( Now let's take a moment to talk about all the points in which this story fails: )
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| A Long Forgotten Sensation - Kai/Ruki - Oneshot |
[06 Jan 2010|06:08pm] |
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Title: A Long Forgotten Sensation
Author: 8written74word8
Chapters: 1/1
Genre: Drabble
Rating: G
Warnings: None really
Pairing: Kai/Ruki
Summary: "Are you remembering what it felt like?"
Disclaimer: No I don't own....I unfortunately don't have enough money to buy them.... yet >D
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